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dollhouse

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Floating dust outlines the fading garnet light
that filters in through the attic's tired eyes
softly bloodshot by the sleepless night before.

and I, the smallest shadow living here,
gently whisper to the staircase
to ask, if she does not mind
to creak beneath my steps,
and tell her secret.

i've china skin, as pale as death.
what gave me life is gone, moved on
to grow and change like i cannot

and I, the smallest ghost to haunt this place
(as if there's someone left to haunt)
still lie in silence


waiting


but i will wait forever.
i think my love for ghost stories is growing.

the first part is my favorite, i need you guys to critique the rest of it. it doesn't feel finished.
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Xajek's avatar
I really like the last line. I like that it's "but" rather than "and". It really gives it more of a punch.